At six, I notice my first woman
I like her lovely painting
I hate her smarter art.
At ten I watch her
I like her colourful trinkets
I hate her good score cards
My ground games more interesting!
At twenty I visualize her
I like pretty brows, the prettier skin
More in number than singular
I like that sense of owning many a pretty prize
I hate singular long lasting presence
My success ladder more precious!
The late twenties
I push pretty faces to social network sites
I begin to need one whose face holds a heart
At thirty I notice her
I like her pretty face less than I do her gray cells
I hate her shallow self
The late thirties
I am tired of anorexic , online smiles
I need a home maker, a mother
At forty I see her
I like her substance, her cerebral links
I hate her wilt at my mid life payment crises
At fifty I see her at last anew
I see through grooves that never fit.
Lol... anusha, what a perspective!!How can a 'woman' speak for how a man thinks? enniku vaiya ee kochinde oru karyam. Deivame ee sathanathine entha ingeney shrishtichathu?
ReplyDeleteIt is a laudable writing.
ReplyDeleteyou think how a man perceives about women in different ages.Now,try to write how you,women think about a man .That will be interesting from woman writer.
Sandeep, just imagine what would happen to the world if one 'really' understood how the other thinks?
ReplyDeleteSir, Thank you. Sure will attempt a post on it.
ReplyDeleteInteresting setup, especially the placement of the stanzas. Seems to reflect the ebb and flow of life.
ReplyDeleteHate seems to be a pretty strong emotion for a six year old boy. Jealousy may be more realistic. Perhaps instead of the like/hate binary, maybe have the narrator's emotions change from age to age to show his changes in maturity? I think it would help emphasize how he sees her from these different ages.
Faded Harbor:Thank you for the comment. Your suggestion made me look at my writing style from an angle I have not earlier.
ReplyDeleteWhy do you watch everything from the brain? Feelings cant be brainy.
ReplyDeleteTrue but then thoughts can't be always brainy too. What about soft heads and hard hearts?
ReplyDeletewell written.. :) its simple n sweet
ReplyDeleterunawaydoc: Thank you for the comment and welcome to the blog.
ReplyDeleteFantastic Anusha !! Nice way to show evolution !! :)
ReplyDeleteBinu Thomas, Thank you for finding it fantastic!
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